21.-22. little voices
Posted on April 22nd, 2009 by desert ratPosted in National Poetry Month, Poetry | 5 Comments »
These can be read as two separate poems or as one connected poem. I’m not sure what this technique is called, but I think of it as twinning – twin poems, related but apart.
| Little voices coming from the neon clouds little star making tracks across the universe brew me a latte (somewhere he’s walking) with cinnamon & sugar (the flowers are talking) illuminated touch fills you with light inside, like fireflies exploding, bright streamers of blue fire turn children’s faces into Halloween masks little screams rising in the night chasing sparklers writing their names in the air boats on the water dance with their reflections |
I can hear somewhere close by flying low big metal bird painting the sky lazy brush strokes pale foam white (who goes there?) they’ll make the rain come (torrent of voices) we’ll dance skin to skin lost in the dark hiding in long grass sugar spilled stars flare in our eyes (they grow too fast) gone too soon fill us up before we fall into the fire deep in the earth we can still climb out of the mist into the moonlight |
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and disappear. |
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- T.H.
Cafe writing /Twin Poems #1, for NaPoWriMo
(music at the time: Romeo + Juliet soundtrack; Stars – Set Yourself on Fire)
another nice one..thanks again for sharing
That’s very clever. Next you’ll be doing the poem with a message in the first and last letter of every line ;P It would be interesting to read this at reading night with two people reading the different voices.
Wonderfully addictive!
Never mind Little Voices,
you NEED to
SHOUT THIS
from
THE ROOFTOPS!
that is a wonderful example of twin poems standing on their own….and bringing it home with the last line was a beautiful close… it is inspiring…
Good to hear it works well outside my own head. ;-)
STG: Thank you! Although I think twinned poems probably work better when reading them off a page. Maybe I’ll follow ZoH’s suggestion and see how it sounds with two different people reading out loud.